Dragon Tail – Chapter 21!

(Removed, cuz of fear of plagiarism. Call me paranoid.)

 

 
So, what do ya think? I’ve noticed that there’s less action in these two, I dunno if it bored you, and if it did then I’ll try and fix it. Don’t worry! There’ll be a lot of action later on!
So yeah, any suggestions or comments? Has it gone too soft for you? Or was this peaceful section a nice breather?
Earspeck! Bye!

3 thoughts on “Dragon Tail – Chapter 21!

  1. Carl, this chapter ROCKS!!!! I can really feel the tension that’s building up to something really big happening and I wanna know what that is!!!!! So you have me completely HOOKED, because I wanna find out what happens when Whirlwinds goes into the Netherworld Forest AND because I wanna find out about Emerald’s memory! 😀 I like the fact that we find out more about Ifri and Thunder in this chapter, cuz for the last couple of chapters it’s been all Emerald and Whirlwind, which is great, but I’m glad  that Ifri and Thunder now have some more depth 🙂 I liked the way that Ifri, Thunder and Emerald all helped Ifri in his/her special way that really did add depth to the characters. 🙂 I can’t wait till you post the next chapter, I’m curious as to what happens now! 🙂 These two chapters DID NOT bore me at all, in fact they made me realise just how good your story really is and I’m not just saying that I MEAN IT!!!!!! The description in this chapter was AWESOME too! I can really imagine what’s happening! 🙂 Like I said, these chapters didn’t bore me AT ALL and they were a nice breather from all the action to be honest! I mean I love the action, but occasionally a nice couple of chapters like these two is nice so we can get to know the characters better! 😀 And it is NOT going to soft for me! 😀 I love a bit of softness in with action 😀 It’s a great contrast and is a nice breather 🙂
     
    And something I thought about Chapter 20 again (just thought of it) I never knew you could be so sensitive, I mean you wrote what Whirlwind said to Emerald about friends always being there for each other, so that shows you have a more sensitive side! 😀 Oh and the last paragraph where’s Whirlwind is thinking about Emerald and thinking that she LOVES him I just went "Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!"
     
    Loved the two chapters Carl, and if you dare change anything unless it’s grammatical then I may have to hurt you, because I love both of the chapters! 🙂
     
    OK, I’d better go, and if I don’t speak to you before, have a great Christmas! 😀
     
    Specky Christmas-speck and a specky new speck!!!
     
    See you soon
     
    Love Em xxx -hugs-

  2. GRRRREAT! I’ve done it right!
     
    I was trying to get this chapter to build up tension, and I was worried that I hadn’t done it right, but I HAVE! Booyah!
     
    Glad you liked it, and I was worried about the development balance, because like you said, it’s all been Emerald and Whirlwind, and I thought I might have overdone it. There was actually another chapter between 20 and 21, but I deleted it because of the balance, I think one more chapter would have ruined it.
     
    And I was also trying to emphasise that each of my characters were very unique and had individual talents (not Whirlwind, we haven’t seen his talent yet, well, apart from being able to breathe ice), I mean, Emerald is a peaceful, slightly mysterious Western Dragon, and has this special voice that can send dragons into a trance, helping them to relax. Ifri is an outgoing, intelligent young Drake, who has a great talent for anything technological, and has a lot of survival skills under his belt. Thunder is a powerful, patient Great Dragon, and likes to share his fighting skills with other dragons that need or wish to learn from him. See? All unique! And I’m glad you picked that up!
     
    And it’s unlike some other stories, where they all have the same talent. Can’t name any off the top of my head, but then again, I don’t read that much! I read several stories on a subject, find they all have the same ending and incredibly boring characters, and then ASSUME they are ALL the same from then on, before moving to another type of story. And then I get bored after about seven years and play DIG-DUG, which is much better, as it has NO END and is ALWAYS DIFFERENT! And has that cheesy yet brilliant music in the background that only plays when you move.
     
    And that’s the story of my life, dude! Was born, got educated while reading several boring stories all with a predictable ending, stopped reading, played a games console, got hooked, suddenly became extremely interested in traditional dragons for some reason that I don’t even know, read dragon stories (all with the same ending), suddenly got bored and annoyed of thinking dragons were horrible creatures and started building my own myth about them, stopped reading FOR GOOD, started writing, made Beat The Computer, started blogging and HERE I AM NOW, TALKING ABOUT IT TO A READER THAT HAS NOW FALLEN ASLEEP!!
     
    Okay, back on topic!
     
    So, don’t worry, we’ll see Whirlwind’s true talent soon enough!
     
    And you say that "Ifri, Thunder and Emerald all helped Ifri in his/her special way"? You nean Whirlwind, dude! Are the character names confuzling you, or is is just the gay Frenchies frying your brain? 😀
     
    And I can be really senstitive like that! You won’t ever see it in real life, though! It’s like my alter ego, I call it Dragon Mode! You’ll never ever be able to see me in it, unfortunately. No, I do not turn into a dragon! It’s like all my feelings are amplified, and I can choose what one I want to write down, and the more I write without stopping, the better it gets. I also drift into my custom-built myth world, the Dragon World, in a weird kind of semi-trance, just focusing on the story, taking bits of my myth and piecing them together. Some GOOD trance music helps, too! You know? And then when I hear something quite close, BANG! I’m suddenly back into the real world! That’s why I can’t write well with people watching.
     
    Hey, you can call me a freak, I don’t care! Dragon Mode works insanely well for me!
     
    Maybe I should try and be in Dragon Mode all the time! But then I wouldn’t be me, would I?
     
    Glad you liked them both! I’m just gonna go write my next entry! SPECKY CHRISTMAS!

  3. Hey!!! How are you???
     
    Guess what I’m doing, except for commenting on your comments on my comments. Go on TRY AND GUESS!!!!!!!! Yep if you guessed FRENCHIE you’re right!!
     
    I’m glad I got the right idea with this chapter I really am, I thought I’d got completely the wrong idea! And about the Ifri/Whirlwind confusion, yes Frenchie did confuzzle my brain!
     
    And Dragon Mode sounds cool to me! 🙂 And going into a trance sounds exactly like you 🙂 And you’re right about if you go into Dragon Mode all the time. It’d be cool cuz we’d see a different side to you, but you wouldn’t be you!! And I don’t think I could cope with that! 😀
     
    OK, back to Frenchie! Please save me Carl! 😦
     
    See you soon 🙂
     
    Specky Christmas-speck!
     
    Love Em xxx -hugs-

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