Dragon Worlds – Chapters 4 + 5

HOOOARRRGHHHH! MARRRRS!
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
Hyper
 
 
Okay… that was just one bite. I’m okay now…
Rightiho then! Here you go, the next two chapters. I edited the 6th chapter so much that I accidentally doubled the size of it. Hope that doesn’t faze any of you dudes.
 
Oh, and Matt (that’s Matt Berry, PotMan, Bam, etc. etc.), if you’re reading this… Well, okay. Pretty much everyone should know that THE SCHOOL MEGAMIX IS NOW 12 MINUTES LONG! WOO! Yes, there is a new section. A funky part with a saxamaphone solo.
Just click on teh link, and then on teh download botton. Enjoy. Just excuse the final bit of it, I’m working on it. It’s still not finished!
You can go now, Matt. That is, if you don’t wanna read my story.
MARSS!
Hyper…
 
//Microsoft C++MS, That’s C++, MongMaster Style
if func(mars)==1
then func(arm) mov(up)
func(mouth) act(chomp)
endif
if func(mars)==0
then entity(carl) playani(sulk)
endif
end
 
Open-mouthed That got it.
Okay, here it is. Oh, and by the way, I think the way I write dialog needs to be improved… no wait, Rowling did it like that! I think… Eh, who cares? She’s a weirdo.
(PS: I nearly copied just one chapter, thinking it was both of them. Have fun…)
(PPS: You’re not gonna like one dragon after you’ve read this. Maybe two. No, wait…)
 

(Removed, cuz of fear of plagiarism. Call me paranoid.)

 

So, you like? You no like? You like no liking of my like?
NOEL EDMONDS: 2,559 words! Like, or no like?
Open-mouthed
Ya, sorry about my marsy hyperness.
I think that dialog is my weak point for some reason. Then again, I thought that this sucked until two people say that it doesn’t, so I might be wrong again! Open-mouthed
 
Okay, gotta close this quick, my mum’s up my ass and has asked me, like, four times in the past MINUTE to get off. Really annoys me.
Ah well, hope you enjoyed it. See ya!
 
if func(mars)==1
then func(arm) mov(up)
func(mouth) act(chomp)
endif
if func(mars)==0
then entity(carl) playani(sulk)
endif
end
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2 thoughts on “Dragon Worlds – Chapters 4 + 5

  1. Hey Carl how are you?
     
    It’s fine to be HYPER, especially if it’s because of a mars bar (Mars Bars are yummy!) 🙂
     
    Anyway onto what I thought of the story:
     
    Chapter 4:
     
    I loved this chapter, I liked the twist about Ice and how he turned out to be evil, that was a really good twist in my opinion. THe torture scene shocked me a bit but that was good because of the vivid description, I mean that worked a great effect because people like to be shocked in stories (I know I do anyway.) The blizzard scene was really well described too and it made everyone realise that dragons are not invincible. In fact, the whole chapter did that! I know some people think dragons are invincible so this chapter was good because it gave depth to a dragon and made people realise that they are mortal. Overall, once again there’s nothing you can improve on and I LOVE IT!!!
     
    Chapter 5:
     
    This chapter was one of my favourites of the whole story. I really enjoyed reading it. The description at the begining was fantastic and I know that when Whirlwind got attacked again I was worrying and thinking "oh my god, he can’t die!!"  I like Thunder, and the description was great!! I was so relieved for Whirlwind when Thunder trusted him. Then I was really upset for Thunder when he  told Whirlwind what had happened to him, but then I was happy when Thunder asked Whirlwind to be his master! So what a rollercoaster ride of emotions! 🙂 Anyway, that’s one of the main reasons why I love this chapter so much, I love a story that takes me on a rollercoaster of emotions and a lot of other readers do too, so you’re onto a winner with this chapter! And I’m deadly serious!! So overall, nothing to improve again, and I LOVE IT!!!!
     
    Seriously, you really should think about getting this published
     
    Anyway, I got to go, see you soon
     
    Love Em xxx -hugs-

  2. Yo, Em! You just said something that I’ve been DYING to hear from another person!
    "It made everyone realise that dragons are not invincible. In fact, the whole chapter did that! I know some people think dragons are invincible so this chapter was good because it gave depth to a dragon and made people realise that they are mortal."
    And that’s what I believe! I believe that dragons are pretty tough, but they aren’t invincible! That was one of the traditions that I messed with a bit. And I’m glad someone picked up on that!
    And I was actually pretty worried with chapter 5. But now that you think it’s the best in the story, I should really stop doubting myself here!
    That’s great. Glad you’re enjoying it! 🙂 I’ll mess with a few more chapters and upload them here soon.
    Eekay, see ya!

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